Live in the present.
focus on now not past or the future You owned the happiness that someone is chasing.
When I was young, I hoped to grow up. I would like to image and expect my future. I want to be a freshman in a college and enjoy the colorful life. When I graduate, I can find a job and choose the life I like. Why I want to grow up? Maybe I can have my own life and control my life. I can stay up late. I can eat what I want. It was simple things. But that was the real thoughts at that time.
But now, I think I want to go back to the childhood. With the real fact of world appears in my mind. I start to know the difficulties of the world and I know it is hard to be an adult. I can stay up late, meanwhile, I need to schedule my time. I know it is a kind of escaping. But I miss the past. I begin to admire other's life. Maybe when I become older, I will miss the things I can do when I was young.
In my opinion I think there are some showing parts in your essay that is highlighted as a telling part. I liked how you did differentiate between the two paragraphs. I think your point is to compare your life as a child and now and how your goals has changed with the change of your age. I think your essay is relevant and their are no extra sentences, maybe just the first sentence.
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